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The best way to improve standards in education I'd to ensure that class size are small. Do you agree or disagree

The best way to improve standards in
education
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 is to ensure that
class
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 sizes are small. Do you agree or disagree
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 Many suggestions have been made to achieve better results with respect to
education
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, yet only
few
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 seem to work. Some argue that
education
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 quality can be improved by keeping the
class
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size
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 small. While I think
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 measure is sure to help raise the quality of
education
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, it is not without its downsides. To start,
one
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 should consider some possible drawbacks to holding a
class
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 for a small number of
students
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.
One
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 immediate concern is the costs of
education
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. Once the
class
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size
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 shrinks, each remaining individual student should pay extra to make up for the cost that would
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 be split among many other
students
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.
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 can particularly be problematic in areas where school funding is limited like private schools.
One
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 other possible outcome is
shift
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 in student personality.
Students
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 learning in relatively small groups of 3 to 5 tend to develop less social
behavior
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 and do not get many chances to learn to work as a team:
one
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 cannot be an exemplary citizen if they are not a good team player. Having said that, I support small
class
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 sizes to attain better standards in
education
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. The
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 reason for
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 has to do with longer student-teacher interaction. Admittedly, once the
class
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size
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 is down to, say 5, the teacher is able to give each student more of his/her time and attention.
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 gives the teacher plenty of time to discuss
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 content like homework and a new chapter for the day and a chance to find out more about their
students
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. More than just discussing assignments, time saved from not having to teach an oversized
class
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 can be used to do additional classroom activities to
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 hammer home concepts learnt in the
class
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. Considering both these benefits,
small
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class
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size
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 is generally
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preferable, should
one
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 wishes to boost
education
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 quality. In conclusion,
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 there are some problems associated with downsizing in the classroom, I am of the view that it is an advisable course of action as far as improving standards in
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.

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