Some people believe that children should spend their free time with their families. Others believe that this is unnecessary or even negative. Discuss the possible arguments on both sides, and what is your opinion?

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of debate whether a child should spend his or her leisure
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with family while
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hold the view that
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will provide no good for a child. As per my ideology, spending
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benefits
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improving their relations but they can get expert assistance from parents. To commence with, the
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is due to the fact that if children spend their extra
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