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A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in your country. You have heard about a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her explain how to apply for the job

#friend #job #country #company #sort #work
Dear John, I hope you're doing well. I'm so glad to hear from you after
such
 a long time since we both were
graduate
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 from
the
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apply
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University. I'm writing
this
 letter to let you know that I've found a career which is suitable
to
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for
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 you which is
software
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a software
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 engineer in my current organization. It includes coding in
programming
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a programming
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language
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 like Java.
Firstly
,
this
 position is for a software
developing
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 engineer who has a computer background and it is exactly matched
to
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apply
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your studies and passion. As I mention earlier that
this
 job involves programming Java which
i
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 believe
it
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apply
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is your strength and you have a great
skill
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 in Java language. I request you to go through the career description online on our
organization
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 website which is www.infotech.com on that website you will get a link
of
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job
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a job
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to apply
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apply
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applications
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 where you fill in all the details required and upload your best project work related to the job. All the best for your future, take care. Yours friendly, Sam
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reputation
  • industry
  • duties and responsibilities
  • typical day
  • skills and experiences
  • job requirements
  • company culture
  • personality
  • work ethic
  • application process
  • job listing
  • submit an application
  • documents required
  • tailored resume
  • cover letter
  • relevant experiences
  • reviewing documents
  • practicing for interviews
  • promptly
  • deadlines
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