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Higher education can be funded in several ways including the following three: 1. all costs are paid by the government. 2. all costs are paid by the students. 3. all costs are paid by the student using loans from the government that must be repaid after graduation. disscus the benefits of each option. Which is the best one?

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The debate over
government
 funds for
education
 is a hot potato. In the current world, it is undoubtedly true that after school
education
 who can pay money for
further
education
. So there are several options
such
 as
government
 funds, own self and taking a loan from the
government
. I would like to discuss the benefits of all options and give my opinion in these upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, some people believe that
government
 should pay all the fees for higher
education
.
Moreover
, pupils are not able to do any kind of work. So they can earn money.
Although
, they are depended on adults for their personal needs.
Thus
government
 paid
education
 fees for pupils.
Secondly
, a student takes responsibility for their
study
. So, they become a more responsible person in the future.
For example
, in many overseas countries, students can do both together
study
 as well as a job. They are dependent neither on their parents nor the
government
 for their personal needs. So, it is clear that student must pay their
study
 fee on their own.
Lastly
, students get a loan from the
government
 and repaid after graduation. They take a loan from the
government
 for
study
 purposes and repaid after higher studies.
Thus
, they become more responsible to pay loans back. To conclude, I repeat that all option has their own benefits.
Although
, its opposite can be overlooked.
However
, I firmly believe that students must pay their fees on their own.
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