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Competitiveness amoung high school students should be encouraged. Do you agree or disagree?

#competitiveness #amoung #school #students
Social
Media
 for Adolescents Thanks to social
media
people
 have communicated
each
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 other whose never dating with them face to face.
However
, by means of social
media
people
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reaches
reach
reachs
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reach
 many opportunities. Some experts claim that using
soscial
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social
media
 has
bad
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 influence on adolescents
several
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 aspects. On the one hand, we have been living
a
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communication age
that
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where
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people
 have to pursue novelty which has shared usually on social
media
. We are able to learn
many
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 news via social
media
 faster than
TV
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through TV
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 or newspaper on
condition
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the condition
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 that follow appropriate accounts.
For instance
,
a
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 event that
taken
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 place in France is able to reflect on social
media
 immediately and we managed to be informed about that incident.
Therefore
, social
media
 has many beneficial
property
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properties
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such
 as
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 the news.
On the other hand
, some experts argue that using social
media
 by
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adolescents
adoslescents
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adolescents
 cause negative
effect
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effects
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 on their mental and psychological progress. In fact, teenagers have born in
internet
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the internet
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 age and they tend to learn every
things
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thing
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 via
internet
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the internet
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especially
especillay
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especially
 social
media
.
Although
 social
media
 has offered many
chance
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chances
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 for communication,
unfortunately
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,unfortunately
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 young
people
 have been exposed to
contents
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content
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 that inconvenient for them.
For example
, if a young person followed an account that every time shared
good looking
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 photos, the teen would worry about
own
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their own
his own
her own
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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.
Thus
, due to social
media
,
development
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the development
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 process of
adoslescents
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adolescents
 has impressed bad. To conclude, in spite of social
media
has
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 offered many opportunities
involved
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involving
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communication
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in communication
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 and pursuit of news, it has
bad
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a bad
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 impact on
development
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the development
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 process of
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adolescents
adoslescents
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adolescents
some
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 aspects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • competitiveness
  • motivate
  • academic results
  • essential skills
  • time management
  • discipline
  • goal setting
  • innovation
  • creativity
  • outperform
  • real world
  • resilience
  • dealing with failure
  • life skills
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