In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. Do the advantages of such method outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,
problem
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the problem
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of
traffic
jams is increased dramatically all over the world so
government
should take some actions against
this
problem
such
as increasing tax amount
also
government
start new routes ,improve
the
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apply
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roads and develop
transport
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the transport
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system. In
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essay, I would
benefits
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the benefits
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and drawbacks of
this
problem
. On the one hand , all over the world
traffic
problem
swelled rapidly , people buy personal automobiles for their personal purpose
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therefore
pollution
also
increased by
this
so that
government
would apply new rules to overcome
this
problem
.
Firstly
they apply
new
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tex rate to high prise cars and bikes
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therefore
people do not use their personal vehicles for going anywhere.
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, they
also
provides
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now buses , cars and auto for local residents
therefore
also
all nation overcome to
traffic
problem
and
also
declined in
pullution
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pollution
solution
.
On the other hand
, if
government
apply new rules so there are so many problems
come
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in
way
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a way
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such
as ,
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the prise
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price
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prise
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price
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of petrol and diesel increased and many folks
also
do not like to
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going
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anywhere from using
of
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buses
becuase
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because
they don't on time.
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, people do not go
any
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to any
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place with
relaxness
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relaxes
relaxed
and joy . In conclusion, many countries
suffers
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from pollution and
traffic
problem
so that's why if
government
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the government
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should apply
this
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these
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rules so surely they survive
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better
betterly
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better
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