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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. Do the advantages of such method outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
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 of
traffic
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 jams is increased dramatically all over the world so
government
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 should take some actions against
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 as increasing tax amount
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government
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 start new routes ,improve
the
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roads and develop
transport
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 system. In
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benefits
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 and drawbacks of
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. On the one hand , all over the world
traffic
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 swelled rapidly , people buy personal automobiles for their personal purpose
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 pollution
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 increased by
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 so that
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 would apply new rules to overcome
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 tex rate to high prise cars and bikes
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 people do not use their personal vehicles for going anywhere.
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provides
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 now buses , cars and auto for local residents
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 all nation overcome to
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 and
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 declined in
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pollution
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.
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government
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 apply new rules so there are so many problems
come
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way
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such
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the prise
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price
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prise
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price
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 of petrol and diesel increased and many folks
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 do not like to
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going
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 anywhere from using
of
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buses
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because
 they don't on time.
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, people do not go
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 place with
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relaxes
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 and joy . In conclusion, many countries
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 from pollution and
traffic
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 so that's why if
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government
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the government
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 should apply
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this
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these
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 rules so surely they survive
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better
betterly
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better
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