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Doctors, nurses and teacher make a great contribution to society and should be payed more than entertainment and sport celebrities. Do you agree or disagree?

#doctors #nurses #teacher #contribution #society #entertainment #sport #celebrities
Well, It is impressive and surprising. I know that
people
 should not eat more than 5g of
salt
 daily because of the hypertension risk. the study found out that eating much
salt
 relates to
the
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 reduction in life expectancy. I often go out for eating, and sometimes I add a little
salt
 at mealtimes,
such
 as when I eat chicken soup
,
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 or eat some fruits. Of course. It is really strange. In my country,
people
 rarely add
salt
 at mealtimes because chefs always serve appropriate taste dishes. According to a medical journal, the average life expectancy is 72 for females and 70 for males. It has increased in recent years. I think that
people
 should do exercise regularly. Actually, they need to do immediate tense exercises for more than 60 minutes per week.
People
also
 need to eat a balanced diet with a lot of vegetables, a medium amount of meat and carbohydrates, and just a little oil or fat. .. I like some western food
such
 as beef steak, and spaghetti noodles. Near my living area, there is a western restaurant, I sometimes go there for dinner. I love cooking but I have not cooked for many years. I am living in a rented room, it is small. I don't want to make it look like a mess with many kinds of stuff. Of course my mom. She makes meat bread and rice very well... She sells these dishes in the morning. She earns a living in
this
 way. It is so simple. I think healthy eating is a part of a healthy lifestyle, which involves some other things
such
 as work, relaxation, sport or exercise, relationships...
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical role
  • healthcare professionals
  • societal well-being
  • disparity in income
  • skewed values
  • essential services
  • remuneration
  • mitigate
  • global shortages
  • inherent value
  • nurturing
  • compensation
  • societal contributions
  • profound impact
  • equitable distribution
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