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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So governments and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world #people #situation #governments #organizations #amount #damage #environment
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OUR WORLD FACES SEVERAL PROBLEMS IN RECENT YEARS
SUCH
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 AS ENVIRONMENTAL ISSUES. IT HAS BEEN THOUGHT THAT HUMAN BEINGS CAN CARE FOR THE PLANET WITH THEIR INDIVIDUALISTIC ACTIVITIES WHILE OTHERS BELIEVE THAT REDUCING THE HARM CAN BE ENSURED ONLY BY AUTHORITIES AND LARGE-SCALE
FACTORIES
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 ’ EFFORTS.
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 ESSAY WILL EXPLAIN WHY INDIVIDUALISTIC ACTIVITIES MAY NOT BE ENOUGH AND I TOTALLY AGREE WITH THE OPINION THAT
GOVERNMENTS
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 AND ENORMOUS COMPANIES HAVE TO TAKE RESPONSIBILITY AND ACTIONS TO PROTECT THE
ENVIRONMENT
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.
FIRST
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 AND FOREMOST, INDIVIDUALISTIC PRECAUTIONARY MEASURES SEEM INEFFECTIVE AND UNNECESSARY AS LONG AS LARGE-SCALE
FACTORIES
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 CONTINUE TO CAUSE ENORMOUS DETRIMENTAL EFFECTS ON THE
ENVIRONMENT
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 WITH THEIR END PRODUCTS. TO ILLUSTRATE, I CAN BE EXTREMELY CAREFUL ABOUT THE USAGE OF DEODORANT AND CAN NOT BUY A PACKAGED PRODUCT BUT ON THE CONDITION THAT A DEODORANT COMPANY PURSUE TO PRODUCE CARBON FOOTPRINT, MY MEASURES AND SACRIFICES WILL NOT BE ENOUGH. BECAUSE OF THAT FACT,
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GOVERNMENTS
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, LARGE COMPANIES SHOULD TAKE CHARGE OF PROTECTING NATURE. APART FROM
FACTORIES
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,
GOVERNMENTS
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 SHOULD SPARE A BUDGET FOR
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 SERIOUS PROBLEM AND PREVENT TO THE
ENVIRONMENT
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 BE WORSENING WITH TIME. TO EXTENT IN DETAIL, THEY MAY ENCOURAGE AND SUPPORT COMPANIES WITH A DISCOUNT ON THE TAXES OR ARRANGE SOME AWARENESS CAMPAIGNS FOR INDIVIDUALISTIC FIGHTS. THESE KINDS OF SUPPORTIVE AND AWARENESS STEPS CAN PROTECT THE
ENVIRONMENT
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 FROM BEING DESTROYED. TO SUM UP, HUMAN BEINGS CAN NOT BE EFFECTIVE IN THE PREVENTION OF HABITAT BY CHANGING THEIR DAILY ROUTINE,
INSTEAD
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 OF
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 UNREALISTIC EXPECTATION, MAJOR SOURCES WHICH ARE LARGE-SCALE
FACTORIES
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 AND
GOVERNMENTS
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 SHOULD BARE THEIR OWN NECKS.
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