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The pie chart illustrates the average domestic spending in
Japan
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 and
Malaysia
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 in terms of five category As can be clearly seen that both nations spent the largest proportion of their budget on three categories namely housing, food and other things.
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, the expenditures on healthcare and transport in
Japan
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 were twice as high as in
Malaysia
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. Regarding
Malaysia
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, the greatest amount of expanse was on housing which accounted for 34 per cent of total expenditure, at the same time in
Japan
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,
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 figure was just 10 per cent lower.Look at the other commodities and services, the number of funds in both nations are almost similar, with exception of
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 figure in
Malaysia
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, which was observed 3 per cent less compared to
Japan
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.In terms of food, in ,
Malaysia
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 the amount of money in
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 category accounted for 27% which was relatively high than in
Japan
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.In both ,countries the smallest quantity of spending was on healthcare. in
Malaysia
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,
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 made up 3% while
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 indicator for transport represented 10%.These figures were nearly doubled in
Japan
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 which were 6% and 20% respectively
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