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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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In most countries, town areas are becoming cramped, due to a huge influx of people who move towards the cities expecting better living conditions. So it is constantly argued, to use the countryside to build houses for the people who still move towards the cities. I raise my hand against
this
 affirmation, and the following paragraphs will analyze two factors which contribute to my opinion.
To begin
 with, forests are the main source of providing fresh air. According to a recent research document which was published by the United Nations, India's Delhi has become one of the top cities which suffers from polluted air. In saying that, they have given many reasons for what they are having already. Among those reasons, one highlighted reason was the lack of vegetation around New Delhi.
Therefore
, we need to protect nature
instead
 of destroying it.
Secondly
, forests are the most biologically diverse areas on the planet. Some of them actually host a range of different species, especially indigenous creatures.
For instance
, Sinharaja the largest rain forest in Sri Lanka has been a habitat for more than 20 different species which can only be seen in Sri Lanka.
Therefore
, what if we destroy these kinds of places just to build houses. It will be a sin, in , adding it will be an unfair thing that we will do to our future generations. To encapsulate my writing, I reiterate we must come up with good solutions for the burning matters like housing,
instead
 of destroying our beautiful nature which helps us by providing clean air as well the eternal beauty.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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