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Some people say that people should keep all their earnings and don't have to pay taxes to government. Do you agree or disagree with then statement

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Introduction
Several
people
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 believe that they have to keep their salary on their own and they shouldn't pay any bill as a tax to
governments
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.
this
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 essay will talk about my opinion on the topic and some agreement about giving
taxes
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 and the idea of saving
money
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 for your pocket.
Body paragraph 1
In my mind leaving some
taxes
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 to the country would be very good If
taxes
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 were not wasted on government parties and used for their wallets. In so many countries
people
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 give a high rate of
taxes
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 to the government and
therefore
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 education, hospitals, public transportation etc get free for normal
people
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. when it is clear how much
money
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 is spent in any part of society and
People
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 can trust
governments
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, they can pay
taxes
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 easily and with less stress and agreement, because they know their
money
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 how is investing in their country.
Body paragraph 2
On the other ,way
people
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 don't like to give any
money
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 to
governments
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. they believe in wasting their incomes and nothing happens after. so I think they are doing the right judgement. I do not agree to not leave any
taxes
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. But if the
governments
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 are not trustable,
people
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 ran away to give any
taxes
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 give. we have to pay for everything and no free education, no Health services and etc.
Conclusion
As a
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result
taxes
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 are good but not stealer
governments
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.I think leaving
taxes
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 helps youths to grow up with more peace and some poor
people
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 have more chance to develop their lifestyle ,
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however
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 the
governments
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 need to be more trustable and more trustable and make payment clear for all
people
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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