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Some people say that all popular TV programmes should aim to educate viewers about improtant social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #tv #programmes #aim #viewers #improtant
Nowadays , technology develops
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a lot
alot
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a lot
 and it
affect
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 all the respective area
such
 as television , cinema and many more.
Also
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,Also
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 some individuals say that all television
programmes
 should
be have
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 good story content which good for social issues,
such
 as
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inequality
unequality
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inequality
, education and many more.
Apartfrom
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Apart from
this
 I completely agree with
this
 statement so in
upcoming
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the upcoming
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 paragraph I would discuss
benefits
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the benefits
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 of
this
 change. In
this
 modern era , many
people
 waste their time
to
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watching
non beneficial
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non-beneficial
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 shows
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therefore
 many citizens argue about
this
 matter and they want some television
programmes
 which content and story about
history
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the history
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 and problems of countries so viewer
update
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their self
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themself
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 to
showing
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show
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 these shows.
For example
 ,koun
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carorepati
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crorepati
 is
very
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a very
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beautiful
beutiful
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beautiful
 show, it is one type of quiz competition.
Moreover
 , many other shows are very beneficial for
children
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children's
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 education as well
such
 as geographical shows and word shows.
In addition
, many
people
 nowadays show some entertainment shows
such
 as
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sharma
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 and international shows so if their producers and director making content upon serious issues so
people
 often aware that problem and they make difference to solve the problem.
Furthermore
, educational
programmes
beneficial
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 for students to gain knowledge and
they
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understand their qualities . In conclusion, it is not only beneficial for students
also
 some older
people
 gain knowledge of these
programmes
 so if in future that change occurs so many countries overcome of their problems.
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