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Band 4

Some people say that all popular TV programmes should aim to educate viewers about improtant social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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a lot
alot
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a lot
 and it
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 all the respective area
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 as television , cinema and many more.
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Also
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 some individuals say that all television
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 should
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 good story content which good for social issues,
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 as
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inequality
unequality
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inequality
, education and many more.
Apartfrom
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benefits
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 of
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 change. In
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 modern era , many
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 waste their time
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watching
non beneficial
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 shows
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therefore
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 many citizens argue about
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 matter and they want some television
programmes
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 which content and story about
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 and problems of countries so viewer
update
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their self
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 to
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 these shows.
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carorepati
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very
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beautiful
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 show, it is one type of quiz competition.
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 , many other shows are very beneficial for
children
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children's
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 education as well
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 as geographical shows and word shows.
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, many
people
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 nowadays show some entertainment shows
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sharma
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 and international shows so if their producers and director making content upon serious issues so
people
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 often aware that problem and they make difference to solve the problem.
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, educational
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beneficial
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 for students to gain knowledge and
they
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understand their qualities . In conclusion, it is not only beneficial for students
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 some older
people
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 gain knowledge of these
programmes
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 so if in future that change occurs so many countries overcome of their problems.
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