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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is believed that
universities
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 should provide equal opportunities for everyone, no matter what a student's
gender
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 is, and avoid
gender
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 discrimination in their acceptance.
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, many expect
universities
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 to hold a balance between male and female
students
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 in every
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.
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 is a very controversial issue, and I shall hold the opposite opinion.
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, in my opinion, equality of numbers of
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 based on their
gender
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 in every subject is a fanciful idea, as some areas of work and their related
fields
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 of
study
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 are not physically or emotionally appropriate for a specific
gender
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. Women,
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, would naturally show less interest in physically demanding subjects,
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 as electrical engineering or construction
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.
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,
although
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 not impossible, it is overwhelming for women to
study
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 in
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fields
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.
On the other hand
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, fewer men would
enroll
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 in nursing
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, as
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 subjects emotionally require delicate touches. More importantly, a balanced entrance between males and females in
universities
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 should be based on the talent and capability of individuals rather than being
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-biased. To put it
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,
universities
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 train a limited number of qualified candidates,
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 university acceptance should be a fair competition. Balancing between male and female
students
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 in every
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 may deprive some talented candidates of opportunities. In conclusion,
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 many expect
universities
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 to accept equal numbers of male and female
students
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 in every
field
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 of
study
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, I strongly believe university acceptance should be based on talent and expertise, as some subjects are
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-related. If
students
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 get accepted because of their knowledge and interest rather than their
gender
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, they will be more encouraged to pursue their future occupations based on their
field
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 of
study
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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