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The main visitors to museums and historical sites are tourists, not local people. What is it the case? What can be done to attract local people to these places?

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These days, a vast number of museums and historical attractions seem to experience a lower local people’s attendance rate than the to
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 issue. The cause of the massive difference in the number of the two mentioned types of visitors is varied.
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 of all, most local people have already visited their local’s
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, they have a
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gnificant knowledge of their own culture and history.
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, they have no need to return to these attractions , it’s just a waste of time and money for them.
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, these
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 are no longer visually attractive to the local inhabitants since they have been seeing those for their whole life.
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, people tend to pay a visit to museums which are outside their ne
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with a view to ge
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 comprehensive overview of the traditions in the particular area. Several measures can be taken in order to stimulate the number of locals’ appearance at historical destinations.
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 with, the government should change the public's perception of places considered to be
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 for only sightseeing. Events
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 as weddings, anniversaries and concerts should be allowed to be held in order to attract substantial attention to historical values. Another resolution is that the layouts of museums and historical
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 are renovated with more decorations and unique interior designs.
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, not only tourists but more local visitors will come.
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, the authority can promote places by organizing a creativity fair for both artists and residents. To conclude, local destinations are generally more appealing to the newcomers rather than the local inhabitants due to many reasons. To better
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, there should be media coverage and some policies on historical spots to encourage local visitors.
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