Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
It is said that
people
in
different ages and from different cultures can be gathered well by the Change preposition
of
music
. In my opinion, while it is true that the
Correct article usage
apply
music
is a way to make people
together, it cannot be regarded as a good way as it will not always gather people
well sometimes
badly.
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and sometimes
To begin
with, it seems to me that there are three main reasons that music
can bring people
together. Firstly
, the
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apply
music
is one of ways
which can be used for simple conversation. Add an article
the ways
Secondly
, in most cases
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,cases
people
will feel happy when they hear music
,
so that they become willing to talk with others or near someone. Remove the comma
apply
For example
, it is around the vivid music
that I and my girlfriend fell in love with each other. Finally
, the
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apply
music
is a kind of art, so people
always want to discuss it with others when Wrong verb form
appreciate
appreciating
.
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itappreciating
However
, the
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apply
music
will not always improve positive
influence, Correct article usage
a positive
sometime
will lead to the happening of terrible things. Some Replace the word
some time
music
will also
inspire the fighting eager
of someone or cause their unconscious to Replace the word
eagerness
scare
, which Add a missing verb
be scare
finally
may make them commit crimes. For instance
, soldiers will become extremely brave when hearing the battle cry. Furthermore
, why those bars or night
club are the area in which fighting Fix the agreement mistake
nights
incident
are most likely to take place. We all Fix the agreement mistake
incidents
known
Change the form of the verb
know
the
alcohol is blamed for it, but according to my Correct your spelling
that
knowledge
Add a comma
,knowledge
the
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apply
music
is another important factor.
In conclusion, I insist that music
not only can gather people
but also
promote those who have resentment with
each other to fight.Change preposition
toward
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