Motor vehicle crashes are one of the leading cause of teen deaths. To prevent such road accidents, the government should ban people under 24 to drive motor cycles. To what extent do you agree or degree?

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In the modern world, large amounts of teenagers are getting into fatal motorcycle crashes with the numbers increasing rapidly.
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many argue, that
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problem can be easily solved by creating a new law that would prohibit anyone under 24
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able to drive a motorcycle, I personally believe that with the right precautions, there would be no need to go into
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. Teenagers should be properly educated on the
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and regulations when operating motor vehicles
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as cars and motorcycles. To illustrate, in my home country, a person is able to obtain a driver's licence as soon as they turn 17 and pass a test after undergoing a year-long theory course
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practical driving lessons.
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,
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being taught how to drive without breaking any rules, you are taught the basic
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measures and have to attend first-aid lessons to be able to provide medical attention in the case of an accident or an emergency on the road.
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, by the time you are able to drive a vehicle on your own, you have
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all the necessary information and guidance needed to ensure your
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and the
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of others.
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there will always be
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happening daily, I believe that
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new law could
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cause more harm than good.
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, I strongly disagree with the idea of teens not being able to operate vehicles until the age of 24, as
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makes them prone to breaking the rules and potentially causing fatal
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. A good example of
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would be people illegally driving cars and endangering pedestrians and others, only because they are not familiar with the
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regulations and laws.
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, by denying them
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needed in order to behave safely on roads,
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as car crashes would be seen more often
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before. In conclusion, I completely disagree with the idea of changing the legal age for driving to 24
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it resulting in car
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and fatal injuries rather than solving the problem we are currently dealing with.
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, teens should be provided adequate education on how to operate a vehicle safely.
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Your essay provides a clear response to the task and addresses the prompt effectively. However, it could benefit from a more nuanced exploration of counterarguments to enhance the depth of your argument.
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The examples provided, such as the detailed description of the licensing process in your home country, effectively support your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • motor vehicle crashes
  • leading cause
  • teen deaths
  • prevent road accidents
  • ban
  • under 24
  • driving motorcycles
  • extent
  • agree or disagree
  • enhanced safety
  • reduce fatalities
  • roads safer
  • lack of experience
  • maturity
  • risk-taking behaviors
  • alternative transportation
  • public transit systems
  • subsidized ride-sharing
  • economic impact
  • industries
  • motorcycle sales
  • maintenance
  • insurance
  • enforcement challenges
  • practicality
  • law enforcement resources
  • compliance
  • age discrimination
  • targeted interventions
  • driver education programs
  • stricter licensing tests
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