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In many countries, good schools and medical facilities are available only in cities. Some people think new teachers and doctors should work in rural areas for a few years, but others think everyone should be free to choose where they work. Discuss both of these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answers and provide relevant example and experience you might have.

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In a lot of states, owing to being located
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numerous
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 of educations and treatments, a number of people argue that
teachers
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doctors
 who are new started their jobs should go country-side for
work
, whereas others think that nobody force where they
work
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 idea. On the one hand,
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no one
noone
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no one
 would dispute the fact that large cities
supplies
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 more opportunities than villages
such
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medicine
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 facilities.
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 a lot of
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people
pepople
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people
 have
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 to live in big
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metropolis
metropoles
 as well
teachers
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 and
doctors
 in order to benefit
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 opportunities.
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, a young lecturer can visit museums in
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city
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orde
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 his level of information. There is no doubt that every person can choose
place
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 where do you want to
work
 and live.
Thus
,
doctors
 or lecturers can prefer to live in cities.
On the other hand
, in many nations new
doctors
 and
teachers
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 by
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instead
 of working private
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 due to conditions which are
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submitted
from
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government
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.
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, if a new teacher
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 a job in
private
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the private
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 sector, he would
work
 much more than
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a teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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 who
work
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 for
state
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the state
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 and
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would
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would
 earn less than
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public
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 lecturer as well as
doctors
.
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, demanding
work
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 brings some
obligation
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 like
workin
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working
 in
rural
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a rural
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area
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 because of
govenmental
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governmental
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 policy that it wants to boot degree of
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the country-side
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country-side
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. Briefly,
public
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 desire
from
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it's
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 own workers
executing
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 some duties. To conclude,
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because
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because
 of having acceptable
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causes
courses
couses
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causes
, both arguments
are seems
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 to me logical. In my opinion,
teachers
 or
doctors
 who
are
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want to
work
 in cities with good opportunities should
choose
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 find a job in
private
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the private
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sectors
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. If they do not desire to live in
counry
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country
county
-sides, they would not apply to public jobs.
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