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The unpaid community service should be made a compulsory part in school curriculums. To what extent do you agree?

#community #service #part #school #curriculums
Children
 are the backbone of every nation. Some
people
 believe that free social work must be included in the school syllabus as it results in a flourished society and individualistic growth of youngsters themselves . I too believe that
this
 addition has more benefits than its drawbacks.
To begin
 with , social work by
children
 can be associated with personality development because of
this
 drive
children
 tend to communicate with a variety of
people
 leads to polishing verbal skills .
For example
 , if they start convincing rural areas
people
 to send their
children
 to school they have to be a convincing attitude along with developed verbal skills to deal with a diverse variety of
people
 .Apart from
this
 ,the other traits of life
such
 as trust, honesty, patience ,tolerance , cooperation and team spirit can be learnt .
Besides
 that , young minds serving the community with full enthusiasm gives them a feeling of fulfilment and self-satisfaction . The worthiness for themselves brim with self-confidence and patriotic feelings .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Civic responsibility
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Empathy
  • Real-world experience
  • Theoretical knowledge
  • Practical application
  • Well-rounded character
  • University applications
  • Commitment
  • Potential exploitation
  • Personal growth
  • Public service
  • Volunteerism
  • Community engagement
  • Life skills
  • Teamwork
  • Social responsibility
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