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People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?Write 250 words.

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It is quite common that people
think
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 of deciding their
career
path
 early and stick to it
is
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are
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 more likely to have a satisfying working
life
 than those who frequently change jobs.
However
, I strongly disagree with that because we are now entering the era of
startup
 where changing jobs
are
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is
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 common and means better pay.
Also
, sticking to
one
career
path
 can make people feel bored and less motivated in
life
. Recently, with the massive growth of
startup
 industries, moving from
one
job
 to another is
very
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 common thing to do and as part of
startegies
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strategies
 to get a better salary.
In
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From
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 most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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startup
companies
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companies'
company's
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perspective
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perspectives
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, it doesn't matter anymore what is our background and existing
job
. What matters to them is whether we have the capability to
the
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do the
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job
.
In addition
, startups compete with
the
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conventional companies to hire strong talents. Conventional companies usually are seen as a safe option for most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
hence
 startups will always try to offer better benefit leverage to their candidates.
Therefore
, it is getting easier and
also
 common to make a shift in our
career
path
 with better pay through
startup
 industries.
Secondly
, sticking to
one
path
 usually
lead
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leads
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 to less motivation and boredom. It is true that if
one
 wants to be an expert in a particular domain,
one
 should work for
quite
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a quite
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long
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a long
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 time in that domain.
However
, being an expert
also
 translates to
less
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fewer
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 challenges.
For example
, my uncle is a pensioner from a technology company. He always stick to
one
job
 since he had decided
his
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on his
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career
path
 right after
graduated
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graduating
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 from
a
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apply
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college.
However
,
although
 the
job
 gave him a safe retirement and long-term plan, after 10 to 15 years, he started to feel less motivated to do his
job
 because it was just the same routine every single day.
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Therefore
Therfore
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Therefore
,
through
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by
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 changing
job
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jobs
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 frequently, we could face more challenges and keep ourselves motivated with our work and
life
. To conclude, as we are in the
startup
 era, changing
job
 frequently is a common thing to do and the industries are willing to pay more.
In addition
, moving to
new
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a new
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 occupation will bring new
experience
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experiences
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hence
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and hence
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 keep us engaged with work and
life
.
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