Crimes and other kinds of information on TV and newspapers have bad consequences. This kind of information should be restricted to be shown in media. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement.

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is knowledge , crimes and other atrocities that should

listed

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the

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television and

newspaper

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in newspaper

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shouldn't be hidden from

public

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the public

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. I honestly disagree with

this

statement. Passing

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information

is really a great help in other to

safe

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save

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more lives and properties.

Firstly

for example

,in Nigeria, due to the insecurity problems, with the

information

shared by the

jornalist

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journalist

journalists

and news broadcaster over the television and social media

platform

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people

will be mindful of their movement especially

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people

that travel by road.

consenqently

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consequently

, a lot of

people

have

being

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kidnapped, murdered , rapped and abused physically, mentally and emotionally.

Furthermore

, without the spread of

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information

pieces of information

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informations

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,informations

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a lot more would be happening and

this

could make

people

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apply

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lose their trust

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the

government

Also

, circulating an idea

give

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people

in the

community

clue and

also

a warning that everyone should be

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cautious

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cautions

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cautious

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of their movement and environment . Most of these criminals

comes

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in disguise in other to deceive

people

and

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carry out

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carryout

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carry out

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their wicked plan.

For example

around the axis of Douglas road

owerri

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begger

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beggar

bigger

was asking for help from a woman and the lady in question decided to assist her with some cash only for

lady

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to disappear after giving the

begger

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bigger

money

this

created lots of confusion and a message was passed as well in other for

people

to be careful.

On the other hand

, the idea of sharing criminal and other vital

information

will help to alert one's self and

moreso

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community

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the community

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can engage in forming a vigilante group that will help the

government

and enforcement agencies in getting the culprits involved in

such

criminal

act

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acts

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. Reporting

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crimes gives the

community

a sense of

humor

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that

governor

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has their interest at heart. It

also

creates awareness on the kind of routes not to be taken at a particular hour or day to avoid being

armbushed

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ambushed

or being a victim

also

people

can

also

assist by suggesting to

government

and security agencies opinions that could be vital. Notwithstanding, that the spread could affect individuals psychologically and mentally , families will be scared of allowing their loved ones to travel to distant places ,

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and individual's

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individual's

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health might

be affect

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due to the

information

shared

such

as high blood pressure and fear of the unknown.

People

will choose to migrate to better and safe cities

therefore

population will reduce drastically and

economy

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the economy

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will be affected. In conclusion,

spread

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the spread

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information

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a good way of creating awareness and alerting the

community

members on how to protect their lives and properties, but

restriction

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the restriction

a restriction

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of crime and other

information

will endanger the lives of

people

thereby making the

people

not

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trust the

government

and security agencies.

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