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Many people think that everyone has a right to a university education and governments should make it free for all students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #right #university #education #governments #students
Personally, I’m sure that everyone has a right to
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university education but governments cannot make it free for all students, especially, in under-developing nations
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all of them could make governments lack finance. I believe that it’s very difficult for the administration to give salaries to all teachers without getting fees from students while the source of economics is at an average level
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, almost those who join university will get a subjective feeling when they don’t have to pay the fee. They do not think of the time paying fee so much and they aren’t almost aware of
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 pressure feeling. In brief, I really don’t have the same opinion that government should do that for all students.
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