The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life. To what extent do you agree?

In
current
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scenario
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, it is common for
people
to pursue more than
one
career at the same time to work frequently.
People
of all ages are enrolled
various
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online courses to acquire new skills and
qualification
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qualifications
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. In my
opinion
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developing ourselves is
new
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a new
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and
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exciting
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exiting
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exciting
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chance to encourage
this
trend. The following essay will discuss my views
further
.
people
want to
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achieve
achive
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achieve
more and more as they are not satisfied with what they have. For most
people
working more than
one
job
is the only way to
achive
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achieve
thier
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their
this
ambitions in life. as lecturers spend
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their
thier
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their
free time in tutions, doctors give classes to
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practitioners
practioners
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practitioners
and IT
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management
managment
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management
professional
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professionals
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dedicating
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their
thier
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their
weekends
for
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to
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building
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their
thier
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their
own startups.
Moreover
, everybody is exploring all possible ways of finding an extra income to reach
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their
thier
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their
goals because nowadays basic needs are
also
getting expensive it could be
one
of the
reason
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as well.
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competition
also
encourages many adults to seek more than
one
occupation.
Job
security is no longer
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available
availabe
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available
in many sectors
thus
people
may
loose
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their
thier
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their
job
anytime and to protect themselves against
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phenomenon
phonomenon
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they are working two or more jobs.
For example
in recent times pandemic has left many
people
jobless as companies couldn't manage
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their
the
thier
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their
financial stability. The
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availability
availablity
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availability
of more opportunities
also
motivates many
people
to adopt multiple
profession
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professions
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. on the other
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hand
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hands
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internet is becoming
great
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a great
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facility for
few
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a few
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sectors
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individuals to work from anywhere.
This
enables them
work
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frequently without quitting
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their
thier
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their
full time
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full-time
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job
. In conclusion, ambition and the lack of occupation security are the factors that
people
to pursue multiple careers.
Availablity
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of more and new opportunities made
easier
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it easier
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for them.
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