Doctors, nurses and teacher make a great contribution to society and should be payed more than entertainment and sport celebrities. Do you agree or disagree?

. Well, I believe that the world economy is recovering. After the pandemic period, people
come
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back to
work
and enjoyed their life. They spend money and time on their hobbies
such
as travelling and visiting their relatives. I have never been to Hawaii. I
love
to travel around the world, and Hawaii is one of my favourite
destinations
. I like the way Hawaii's people dance and feel appealed by its wonderful
beach
. I want to visit the Plong Nha cave. It is a domestic destination. I plan to visit most of
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domestic places before travelling to foreign places. To be honest, my
country
has a
lot
of beautiful beaches where you can enjoy your vacation. Near my living area, there are Vung Tou
beach
, Binh Theman
beach
, and Nha Trang
beach
. All of them are wonderful. Going
Further
to the north, there is BD
beach
which has even warm and fresh water but a
lot
of cheap and delicious seafood. I have no fraud
this
summer, I plan to visit Ha Noi
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this
Summer. It is my
country
's capital. There are some historic places
such
as Uncle to
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,
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Guom
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. I
love
to spend my vacation travelling around, visiting some relatives, discovering new
destinations
and enjoying delicious food. Winter? My
country
is located in a tropical area, and it is not wintering here. Well, on the internet, I saw some beautiful
destinations
in winter
such
as Japan or Korea. Well, I
work
all
time
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., and have only 13 days off per year. You know, doctors don't have vacations. We
work
much, do
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day shift, do
work
night shift. Of course, I travelled to a
lot
of
destinations
from
herth
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to the south
such
asHoi
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as Hoi
An, Vung Tau, and Can Tho city. There are still a
lot
of beautiful
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in my
country
. I like to holiday in my hometown. It is peaceful. I am living in a bustling area, working a busy job. I
love
to go to my hometown in order to breathe the fresh air, listen to birds singing in the morning,
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my favourite books in the afternoon. And In the evening, I
love
to be with my parents in my
cozy
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kitchen.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • critical role
  • healthcare professionals
  • societal well-being
  • disparity in income
  • skewed values
  • essential services
  • remuneration
  • mitigate
  • global shortages
  • inherent value
  • nurturing
  • compensation
  • societal contributions
  • profound impact
  • equitable distribution
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