Counties are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
In
this
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industralization
age of 4.0, Correct your spelling
industrialization
industrialisation
the
technology Correct article usage
apply
as
a significant influence on Correct your spelling
has
people
daily life starting from daily Use synonyms
routine
to important things. The same as shopping, as we can buy anything Fix the agreement mistake
routines
at
anywhere conveniently and the product can be shipped to us in a short period. Change preposition
apply
However
, I am Linking Words
convienced
that there are both benefits and drawbacks on Correct your spelling
convinced
this
as the Linking Words
products
we are using are getting more and more similar.
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Firstly
, because of the Linking Words
technology
development, we are able to use Replace the word
technological
the
good quality Correct article usage
apply
products
from foreign countries, which upgrade our living standards. Use synonyms
For example
, we can see most of the Thai and Chinese Linking Words
products
Use synonyms
such
as food and beverage and Linking Words
the
clothing widely used in Myanmar as the quality are good and the price is reasonable.
Yet, there are some similar Correct article usage
apply
products
that are manufactured in Myanmar, Use synonyms
however
, we are getting used to the Linking Words
import
product we Change the verb form
imported
thinks
that the quality of the Change the verb form
think
products
are not the same even though the brand Use synonyms
are
the same. Change the verb form
is
This
has changed the mindset of the Linking Words
people
not to promote the local Use synonyms
products
Use synonyms
Linking Words
instead
depending so much on the import and foreign brand new Correct word choice
but instead
products
.
Meanwhile, have we not obviously seen enough that globalization has caused some minority Use synonyms
tradition
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traditions
disappear
and the young Add the particle
to disappear
people
are not keen to preserve their own Use synonyms
tradition
Fix the agreement mistake
traditions
.
Change the punctuation
?
For example
, Linking Words
traditional
Add an article
the traditional
costume
of Fix the agreement mistake
costumes
an
ethnicity can rarely be seen as Remove the article
apply
people
just wear Use synonyms
the
modern clothes and never wear their own attire even on a special Correct article usage
apply
occasion
.
To put it in a nutshell, I pen down saying that being able to Fix the agreement mistake
occasions
accessible
to Replace the word
access
the
global Correct article usage
apply
products
has made our lives getting better, Use synonyms
however
, should we just Linking Words
forgotten
our background and not Wrong verb form
forget
promoting
our local Wrong verb form
promote
products
?Use synonyms
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