Counties are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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industrialization

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technology

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a significant influence on

people

daily life starting from daily

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to important things. The same as shopping, as we can buy anything

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anywhere conveniently and the product can be shipped to us in a short period.

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convinced

that there are both benefits and drawbacks on

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as the

products

we are using are getting more and more similar.

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, because of the

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development, we are able to use

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good quality

products

from foreign countries, which upgrade our living standards.

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, we can see most of the Thai and Chinese

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as food and beverage and

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clothing widely used in Myanmar as the quality are good and the price is reasonable. Yet, there are some similar

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that are manufactured in Myanmar,

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product we

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that the quality of the

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are not the same even though the brand

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the same.

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has changed the mindset of the

people

not to promote the local

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depending so much on the import and foreign brand new

products

. Meanwhile, have we not obviously seen enough that globalization has caused some minority

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disappear

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and the young

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are not keen to preserve their own

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ethnicity can rarely be seen as

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modern clothes and never wear their own attire even on a special

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global

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has made our lives getting better,

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our background and not

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our local

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2Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Globalization
Uniformity
Cultural exchange
Accessibility
Economic implications
Local economies
Sustainability
Environmental considerations
Consumer choice
Quality of life
Overconsumption
Artisanal goods
Global community
Trade and commerce
Eroding local businesses

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Counties are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

in some countries, the cost livig rapidly increasing. what do you think may be the reasons for this? what effects might this have on society?

government should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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An increasing number of professionals such as doctors and teachers are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What can be done to deal with this situation? Write at least 250 words.