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Living in large cities poses many problems for people. What are the problems? Should goverments encourage more people to live in smaller towns?

Today in most large
cities
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,
people
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 are facing many issues. In the era of urbanization, it is increasingly common that more and more
people
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 are moving to large
cities
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. Due to
this
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,
cities
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 become over-populated and more polluted which results in global warming. I believe that
government
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 should take measures to encourage
people
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 to live in smaller towns by
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the development
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development
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 of smaller
cities
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. The primary issue associated with the migration of
people
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 to urban
cities
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are
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is
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overpopulation
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over population
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overpopulation
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,
increase
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 in pollution tends to
increase
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in
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global warming. In urban
cities
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, inflated prices of properties are due to
mass
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the mass
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 movement of
people
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 as per the density.
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,
people
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 majorly prefer their own vehicle to travel and avoid public transport wherein roads are already congested with limited panes which
results
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into
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in
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traffic
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a traffic
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jam
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jams
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.
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, all metro
cities
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 are famous for
its
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their
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 over-population, pollution,
traffic
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and traffic
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 jam.
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, middle-class/
upper middle-class
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upper-middle-class
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people
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 cannot afford a decent house in
such
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cities
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 and resides in slum areas due to overly priced property.
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, urban
cities
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 are
also
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 majorly contributing to global warming because of
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overpopulation
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over population
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overpopulation
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. These issues can be reduced by
government
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 intervention by taking appropriate actions
such
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 as
development
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the development
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 of smaller towns in terms of better means of transport, improvement in infrastructure,
encourage
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encouraging
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 employment
opportunities
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 through industrialization, setting up
of
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apply
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public projects,
promote
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promoting
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 tourism and so on. The main reason
of
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apply
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people
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migration
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 to urban
cities
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in
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is in
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 search of employment, growth, better
opportunities
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, lifestyle etc. If all
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opportunities
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available
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are available
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 in their own town/
cities
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,
people
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 will
itself
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apply
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only
reluctant
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be reluctant
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 to move into urban
cities
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.
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:
Majority
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the Majority
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 of labourers
migrated
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who migrated
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 to Delhi are from UP or Bihar due to
lack
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a lack
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 of
opportunities
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 in their own
cities
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. I strongly believe that
government
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 should
developed
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develop
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 the smaller
cities
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 / towns through which
people
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 were encouraged to stay in smaller
cities
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. In conclusion, migration of
people
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 to large
cities
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 plays a major role in increasing problems for
people
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 which tends to
increase
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in
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apply
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pollution, over-population,
increase
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 in
traffic
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a traffic
the traffic
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jam
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jams
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, and inflated price of properties.
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, it can be reduced by
government
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 intervention through industrialization, creating employment
opportunities
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 and providing better means of transportation and improvement in infrastructure.

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