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More and more people are moving to big cities these days. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of living in a large city

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The table depicts the source of funding for the police was increased and the pie chart describes the budget of distribution in different departments. Overall, it is readily apparent that the contribution of funding increased, through the local taxes. In terms of spending, there was a marked increase in the technology and building transport department. Whereas there was a little decrease in the salaries. In 2017, the national government contributed 175.5
million
 which was below the following year’s 177.5
million
 pounds.
In contrast
, local taxes were lower in both years,
for example
, local taxes were 91.2
million
 pounds which
was
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 11% lower than the following year. By analyses, the other sources
such
 as grants respectively unchanged in both years
likewise
, in 2017 was 85
million
 pounds and in 2018, 85.5
million
. The total value grew from 304.4 to 318
million
. In terms of budgetary, in 2017 was 75% which declined in 2018 to 69%. Whereas money for technology was doubled and building and transport were unaltered in both years.
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