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Some people think that one should plan in detail activities for their leisure time, while others disagree with this view. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the pace of life is speedy so leisure
time
 has become more valuable.Some people argue that we need to
plan
 in detail for our leisure
time
.In my opinion, l do not agree with
this
 view. On the one hand, somebody thinks we should have enough
plan
 for our leisure
time
 because our relaxing
time
 is limited by our job while we have numerous
things
 want to do.Making plans in detail can help us to solve
this
 problem.
For example
, the employee only has one day of holiday a week but he has a variety of
things
 that he wants to fulfil, mountain climbing, video game playing,whatever.He needs to make a timetable to finish all kinds of
things
 he wants to do.
On the other hand
, other people think it is unnecessary to do a
plan
 for free
time
 because they do not like to follow the
plan
.
For example
, a person goes to another city on vacation
although
 there are numerous tourist attractions in the city he just wants to stay in the hotel and go to another place randomly to make him feel relaxed so he thinks that it is inessential to follow and do the
plan
. To summarize, somebody needs to
plan
 because they have too many
things
 want to do in a short
time
 other people think it is unnecessary because they just want to relax. In my opine, even though there are numerous interesting
things
 I want to do in my free
time
 I do not make any
plan
 I just want to be free in my relaxation
time
.
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