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You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to study/work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter: describe the situation explain your problems and why it is difficult to study/work say what kind of accommodation you would prefer You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Sir or Madam: I would like to bring my accommodation issues, created specifically
due to
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 my
roommate
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's irrational behaviours, to your immediate attention. I cannot concentrate on my studies and find it unbearable to live with
such
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 a housemate. I am hoping that you allow me to shift
into
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 another
room
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 soon. I have been living in a hostel with shared accommodation for the
last
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 year. My previous
roommate
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 was extremely cooperative and friendly. There was nothing he was not willing to solve
together with
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 me as a
roommate
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.
However
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, the student I have been living with for the past two months is quite the opposite. He refuses to collaborate with me and doesn’t clean the
room
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. He has frequent visitors and they smoke in the
room
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. To make things worse, my
roommate
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 has bought a television lately and likes to watch the television all the time with a high volume. Even after my cordial requests, he refuses to cooperate and I find it extremely tough to live with
such
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 a
roommate
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 and study properly. I want to move out of
this
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room
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 as soon as possible and have a different
roommate
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. I would prefer a single
room
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 with kitchen and bathroom facilities. If arranging a single
room
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 is not possible, I would like any
room
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that is
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 peaceful. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Eva Morris

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task achievement
While the letter is clear and well-structured, try to elaborate slightly on the difficulties caused during study hours. This will enhance the completeness of your response.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph presents a single main idea to support a comprehensive understanding of the problems and your request.
task achievement
The letter clearly addresses the situation, explains the problems, and requests specific action, covering all parts of the task comprehensively.
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The tone is polite and formal, suitable for a letter to an accommodation officer.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with a logical flow from describing the problem to proposing a solution.
coherence cohesion
Effective use of paragraphs to discuss different aspects of the issue and solution enhances readability.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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