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Some people argue that climate change has negative effects on business, while other people believe that climate change could create more opportunities to business. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Climate
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change
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 is an ongoing problem around the
world
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. Some people emphasize that due to
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 problem, many companies are facing serious consequences though others think it brings positive effects on business.
Car
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industry
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, which is one of the biggest industries, has negative effects, but in fact, there is a new chance for them to expand the
industry
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.
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, in my opinion,
climate
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change
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 brings more opportunities
on
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to
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 business. At
first
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, a negative consequence for the car
industry
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 is a restriction
of
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on
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 the number of
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vhiecles
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vehicles
. Because of
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global warming, fewer
cars
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 which use fossil oils are produced. In fact, gasses of
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vhiecles
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vehicles
 are harmful because they cover the earth, and keep the
world
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 warm.
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 leads many countries to
reducing
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 the number of
cars
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 with
oils
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oil
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. For, instance, some countries
restricted
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are restricted
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 to
produce
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producing
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cars
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of cars
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, and
change
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 these
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vhiecles
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vehicles
 to
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other new options.
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, there is a great opportunity for
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industry
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 because many companies produce the latest
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vhiecles
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vehicles
instead
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 of normal
cars
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 to solve the
cimate
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climate
change
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. They are electric
cars
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 which use only electricity for driving. Compared to
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normal
cars
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, electric
cars
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 are environmentally friendly.
Few
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 years ago, they were not common choices in terms of
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price.
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, nowadays, more and more people are purchasing these
cars
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. Tesla, which is one of the biggest companies in the
world
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,
succeds
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succeeds
success
 in
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industry
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. As
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 shows,
climate
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change
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 created
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great chance,
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 as electric
cars
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. In conclusion, while
climate
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change
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 has negative impacts on business,
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also
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 lets people get some opportunities. I agree with
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 idea because they became leading businesses around the
world
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 with electric
cars
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 while they faced negative effects on normal
cars
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.
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