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News about problems and emergencies is harmful to individuals and society. Do you agree or disagree?

#news #emergencies #individuals #society
These days, the
news
 is one of the most vital factors in parts of
people
's
lives
.
People
 normally achieve
news
 from many kinds of platforms
such
 as television, and the internet. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
this
 statement and will give rational reasons with relevant examples to support
this
 essay. Most
people
 always follow dairy
news
 because they want to update the content that they are interested
such
 as economy, business, and society ,especially
crime
. When they knew about a
crime
 that happened recently, they can aware of any
crime
 or problem that can occur in their
lives
.
For example
,
people
 can avoid using a route, presented in
news
, where victims are always roped.
Hence
, they aren't harmed by
news
 about
crime
, but they can be aware of the bad things that already happened to others.
Moreover
,
news
 about problems and emergencies can help to decrease the cases rather than increase because the government will take action by improving the
law
 of a country. When the
law
 already improved,
people
 who are easy break the
law
 will be careful before they did harmful things to other's life or society. They don't want to end up their whole
lives
 in jail by sentencing their terrible behaviour. Eventually, the harmful cases will decline depending on the strong
law
. In conclusion,
news
 about a
crime
 is the best choice for me because
people
 will be aware to live their
lives
 and the criminal cases could possibly fall
finally
.
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