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News about problems and emergencies is harmful to individuals and society. Do you agree or disagree?

#news #emergencies #individuals #society
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These days, the
news
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 is one of the most vital factors in parts of
people
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's
lives
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.
People
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 normally achieve
news
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 from many kinds of platforms
such
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 as television, and the internet. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
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 statement and will give rational reasons with relevant examples to support
this
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 essay. Most
people
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 always follow dairy
news
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 because they want to update the content that they are interested
such
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 as economy, business, and society ,especially
crime
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. When they knew about a
crime
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 that happened recently, they can aware of any
crime
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 or problem that can occur in their
lives
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.
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,
people
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 can avoid using a route, presented in
news
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, where victims are always roped.
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, they aren't harmed by
news
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 about
crime
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, but they can be aware of the bad things that already happened to others.
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,
news
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 about problems and emergencies can help to decrease the cases rather than increase because the government will take action by improving the
law
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 of a country. When the
law
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 already improved,
people
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 who are easy break the
law
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 will be careful before they did harmful things to other's life or society. They don't want to end up their whole
lives
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 in jail by sentencing their terrible behaviour. Eventually, the harmful cases will decline depending on the strong
law
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. In conclusion,
news
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 about a
crime
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 is the best choice for me because
people
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 will be aware to live their
lives
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 and the criminal cases could possibly fall
finally
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.
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