Some people believe that you should strictly control your children’s behaviour, while some others believe children should be free to choose their behaviour. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Parents

, nowadays, are spending a lot of money to teach their offspring great etiquette and manners.

While

some people believe that adolescents'

behaviour

must be monitored on a daily basis, others argue that

this

can pose some challenges to their mental health in general. In

this

essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument,

while

I support the latter opinion. On the

first

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hand, a lot of people, who argue that

children

's code of conduct should be controlled by their

parents

or guardians, might say that

this

enables teenagers to develop a strong conscience, being able to tell what is right and wrong. The reason for

this

is that

parents

must monitor their offspring's

behaviour

since

this

will teach them manners and etiquette.

For example

, school-going teenagers in my country, India, are usually rewarded for their attitude and code of conduct.

In contrast

, if these students are not monitored on a regular basis,

then

they might become a bad influence on the adolescents surrounding them.

On the other hand

, I would argue that their behaviours should not be monitored. It is because of

fact

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that

this

will enable them to develop their own opinions and thoughts without any pressure from guardians or

parents

. To illustrate

this

point, a child can learn in abundance in school provided that there is no pressure on him on how to behave each and every second of the day.

On the contrary

, if school-going

children

are measured every single day for their

behaviour

, many of them might become timid and emotionally weak in fear of fulfilling the criteria proposed by their well-wishers. In conclusion,

while

rewarding

children

for their apt

behaviour

can compel them to

become obeying

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children

, some might become emotionally inept because of continuous monitoring. I think that students should be allowed to choose their

behaviour

freely.