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IELTS 13 TEST 4 Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy,with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In addition
 to
this
 following question, I agree with the following and support
this
 statement that it is very important to keep our
home
 and our
workplace
 neat and tidy.
Firstly
, a clean
place
 is a healthy
place
 we should not only keep our
workplace
 and
home
 neat and clean but
also
 our country because cleanliness is the key to success.we should put our waste and garbage in the dustbins and should always put the unwanted things in the right
place
, when someone enters our
home
 the unwanted things should not be seen in front. ,
Additionally
 God gave us green, we should keep it clean and we should always manage to keep our mother nature
also
 clean.
For example
,by helping the cleanliness staff to sweep the street with help of us and joining the beach clean drive and get the beaches clean. we should clean our
home
 and
workplace
 on daily basis, and train our staff and family members to put the waste in the dustbins.
Secondly
, we should
also
 keep ourselves clean by taking baths regularly and keeping our clothes clean and
also
 cutting our nails when needed, and should eat a proper healthy diet.
Similarly
, India has seen rapid growth in keeping the country and their workplaces clean.
Lastly
, the survey that happened
last
 year in 2021,says India has gradually seen a 70% success from 2017 in keeping their surroundings and the city clean. According to the survey that happened in ,2017 the beaches were too polluted with plastic garbage in the year 2017 and in 2021 we have seen much improvement in cleanliness.We were always taught in schools to keep every
place
 neat and tidy. In the end,not only a few should say to keep the
workplace
 or
home
 clean and tidy but
also
 everyone should be trained to do so.
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