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Should arts-related entertainment venues such as museums and art galleries be free of charge for the general public, or should a charge apply for admittance? Discuss this issue, and give your opinion.

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There is a debate about whether the places like museums and art galleries which provide entertainment for people should be given free entrance or not. In my opinion, it should charge a reasonable
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 for admission and
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 essay will discuss the justifications for my view.
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, maintaining a venue is not an easy task and it has many maintenance costs
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 as electricity, water, and cleaning. All these
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 get billed by the relevant authorities and need to be settled on a time for uninterrupted service.
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, there must be a way to earn money to pay bills and so collecting a reasonable amount for admission would help to maintain the
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 nice and clean.
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, to run the
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 it is required to keep dedicated staff as well.
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, staff salaries
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 need to be settled and substantial income is required for
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.
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, some
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 displayed in these museums and art galleries are required to be paid a royalty
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.
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, a regular income is critical to smoothly
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 a high valued aesthetic entertainment
place
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. Paying a very nominal
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 like $5 per person to entrance won't be an issue for a visitor who would like to enjoy fine arts or historically valued
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. It gives an extra value to the
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 inside when the entry is valued and only the people who have real enthusiasm will enter the premises. To conclude, in my view it is always best to charge a small
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 for the entry and use that collection to maintain the
place
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instead
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 of using taxpayer money to maintain a public entertainment
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. It is fair for the taxpayer as well as the museum visitor.
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