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Nowadays a person has to be talented to become famous on the Internet. Discuss this view and give your opinion.

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In
this
 contemporary epoch of technology and digitization, it is a wide perception that one needs to have a unique skill set in order to become popular all over the world,
however
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 I do not agree with
this
 opinion. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views with examples followed by my personal opinion.
To begin
 with, we have a plethora of social media applications
such
 as Facebook, Instagram and Youtube which are quite popular these days. These platforms have many content creators who do not really have any kind of creativity yet make a living out of it. To illustrate
this
, let's take an example of a Youtuber called A, who just puts the videos of his daily routine on his channel which has almost 10 lac subscribers.
Moreover
, despite being all the videos very similar he gets more than one million views on every video.
Furthermore
, there are many influencers who do not really have talent but are still very famous.
On the other hand
, people who have mastered any kind of art do not really bother to showcase their talent in front of other folks.
For instance
, a very close friend of mine has a unique way of singing. Knowing the fact that his videos can go viral within a few minutes he is choosing not to put them online just because
that is
 not his priority.
Additionally
, he believes social media gives fame only for a short period of time which he does not like. To conclude, in my opinion without having any kind of talent a person can gain fame because the audience is liking to watch random things on the internet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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