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Some people believe that you should strictly control your children’s behaviour, while some others believe children should be free to choose their behaviour. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #control #children’s #behaviour #children
Of course. I have a dream to travel to some western countries. On the internet and on TV, I have seen a lot of wonderful destinations in these countries
such
 as beautiful villages, spectacular beaches, stunning cliffs, snowy mountains and ancient buildings. I think
that is
 Da Nang city. Its roads are wide and clean, its' public transport is convenient which a lot of modern buses and bus stations. I often commute about 2 km to my workplace. It is just a little time. Sometimes I stop to buy a loaf of bread, but I almost commute straight to my workplace. Well, in 2010 I travelled to Da Nang city by train. It was a long trip with about 800 in distance, and
last
 for 14 hours. I travelled in the evening, so for most of
this
 period I slept. Some people complain that my city's public transport is so crowded, and there are a lot of pickpockets. Many commuters lost their money, mobile devices and Credit cards on these buses.
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