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1) Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #advertisements #society
using
advertisements
 for selling what commercial
companies
 wish to sell is becoming a debatable topic nowadays. While many individuals believe that
advertisements
 are not a good way of marketing, supporters of
advertisements
 have a different point of view. In my opinion, using advertisement, which the government has legislated several laws containing criteria for legal advertising, could bring financial growth to our economy. Many financial and commercial
companies
 are using celebrities so that they can sell their product to society. From time to time, several
companies
 say something about their
products
that is
 not exactly true, and sometimes they lie. Not only some
people
 hatefully do not like using celebrities for
advertisements
, but
also
 they have negative feelings about those
companies
. They
also
 believe that government should pass several laws about how to advertise properly. Because of
this
 reason, many
people
 are not fans of
advertisements
.
On the other hand
, several
companies
, by using social media and television, have found a way to target
people
's vulnerability about the
products
 they wish to sell.
This
 trick leads to impact marketing which makes money for
companies
 and causes financial growth for our economic marketing.
For example
, some
companies
 using social media can tell
people
 about their
products
' details and several features, and because of the popularity of social media, millions of
people
 can see
advertisements
, and likely, several individuals tend to buy those
products
. To conclude,
although
advertisements
 have been criticized by many
people
 using new legislation could make the marketing situation more acceptable and reliable for society.
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