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1) Some people think that advertisements are good for the society whereas others oppose this view. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #advertisements #society
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using
advertisements
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 for selling what commercial
companies
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 wish to sell is becoming a debatable topic nowadays. While many individuals believe that
advertisements
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 are not a good way of marketing, supporters of
advertisements
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 have a different point of view. In my opinion, using advertisement, which the government has legislated several laws containing criteria for legal advertising, could bring financial growth to our economy. Many financial and commercial
companies
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 are using celebrities so that they can sell their product to society. From time to time, several
companies
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 say something about their
products
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that is
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 not exactly true, and sometimes they lie. Not only some
people
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 hatefully do not like using celebrities for
advertisements
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, but
also
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 they have negative feelings about those
companies
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. They
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 believe that government should pass several laws about how to advertise properly. Because of
this
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 reason, many
people
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 are not fans of
advertisements
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.
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, several
companies
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, by using social media and television, have found a way to target
people
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's vulnerability about the
products
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 they wish to sell.
This
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 trick leads to impact marketing which makes money for
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 and causes financial growth for our economic marketing.
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, some
companies
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 using social media can tell
people
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 about their
products
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' details and several features, and because of the popularity of social media, millions of
people
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 can see
advertisements
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, and likely, several individuals tend to buy those
products
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. To conclude,
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advertisements
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 have been criticized by many
people
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 using new legislation could make the marketing situation more acceptable and reliable for society.
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