Some people believe that you should strictly control your children’s behaviour, while some others believe children should be free to choose their behaviour. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays , attitude
towards
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toward
children
shows the
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that
parents
control their children
in good
manner and bad manner. Some individuals believe every Add an article
a good
parents
should control their Change to a singular noun
parent
children
's behaviour
and all other things
. However
, other
believe that Correct pronoun usage
others
children
should be free to apply their own behaviour
. So, i
would explain both the points and give my Change the capitalization
I
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opinion
oppinion
in the upcoming paragraphs.
On the one hand , many Correct your spelling
opinion
parents
want their children
walk
in their paths Add the particle
to walk
also
they want to control their children
Change noun form
children's
behaviour
. Therefore
many pupils have knowledge about good behaviour
and bad behaviour
. For example
, if parents
learn their son and daughter about how to respect older oeople
and how to give them answer so in future they can make Correct your spelling
people
good
citizen of Add an article
a good
country
. Add an article
the country
Moreover
, many children
learn thing
from their Add an article
a thing
parents
so it is also
beneficial for them in their acedmic
and commercial life because Correct your spelling
academic
parents
are first
teacher all good Change the article
the first
things
comes
from themChange the verb form
come
Add the comma(s)
, therefore,
therefore
it is very Correct your spelling
important
imporatnt
for Correct your spelling
important
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children's
children
choldren's
gradual growth.
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children's
On the other hand
, many people things
that children' s
are free to do all Change noun form
children
things
and also
they apply their own thinking and behaviour
. In this
case
if Add a comma
,case
children
do not understand their older people
feelings and Change noun form
people's
value
so they can harm cultural Fix the agreement mistake
values
value
. Fix the agreement mistake
values
In addition
, many pupils adopt thier
own Correct your spelling
their
behaviour
and therefore
they might be struggle
in their school Change the verb form
be struggling
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because
becuase
they Correct your spelling
because
also
do miss Correct your spelling
behaviour
bihaviour
with their teachers and other students. Correct your spelling
behaviour
Also
some time
they become more Replace the word
sometimes
stturbon
to specific Correct your spelling
stubborn
things
and it will be harm full for them not only in
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apply
fysically
but Correct your spelling
physically
also
in
mentally .
In conclusion , in my opinion , Change preposition
apply
children
must be encourage
by their Change the verb form
be encouraged
parents
so they understand easily their parents
opinion Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
also
it will be beneficial for them to become good
and responsible Add an article
a good
citizen
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citizens
for
society .Change preposition
of
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