Some people believe that you should strictly control your children’s behaviour, while some others believe children should be free to choose their behaviour. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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towards
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children
shows
the
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that
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parents
control their
children
in
good
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a good
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manner and bad manner. Some individuals believe every
parents
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parent
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should control their
children
's
behaviour
and all other
things
.
However
,
other
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others
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believe that
children
should be free to apply their own
behaviour
. So,
i
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would explain both the points and give my
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opinion
oppinion
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opinion
in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand , many
parents
want their
children
walk
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to walk
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in their paths
also
they want to control their
children
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children's
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behaviour
.
Therefore
many pupils have knowledge about good
behaviour
and bad
behaviour
.
For example
, if
parents
learn their son and daughter about how to respect older
oeople
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people
and how to give them answer so in future they can make
good
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a good
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citizen of
country
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the country
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.
Moreover
, many
children
learn
thing
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from their
parents
so it is
also
beneficial for them in their
acedmic
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academic
and commercial life because
parents
are
first
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teacher all good
things
comes
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come
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from them
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, therefore,
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therefore
it is very
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important
imporatnt
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important
for
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children's
children
choldren's
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children's
gradual growth.
On the other hand
, many people
things
that
children' s
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children
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are free to do all
things
and
also
they apply their own thinking and
behaviour
. In
this
case
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if
children
do not understand their older
people
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people's
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feelings and
value
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values
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so they can harm cultural
value
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values
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.
In addition
, many pupils adopt
thier
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their
own
behaviour
and
therefore
they might
be struggle
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be struggling
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in their school
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because
becuase
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because
they
also
do miss
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behaviour
bihaviour
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behaviour
with their teachers and other students.
Also
some time
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sometimes
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they become more
stturbon
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stubborn
to specific
things
and it will be harm full for them not only
in
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apply
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fysically
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physically
but
also
in
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apply
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mentally . In conclusion , in my opinion ,
children
must
be encourage
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be encouraged
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by their
parents
so they understand easily their
parents
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parent's
parents'
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opinion
also
it will be beneficial for them to become
good
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a good
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and responsible
citizen
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citizens
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for
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of
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society .
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