Experts say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more exercises and sport ,more time with family and freinds,whereas now many suffer loniness and health problems. what are the cause of this and what are the solutions?
Studies confirm that
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elderly
eldery
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elderly
people
used to be more
healthier as well as happier Change the word
apply
as a result
of having more family times
and doing more sports. Fix the agreement mistake
time
However
, the majority of old people
are suffering from disease and being
lonely. Wrong verb form
are
This
essay discusses why this
is happening and also
explores the measures which can be taken to tackle these problems.
There are two main reasons for this
trend. To begin
with, the modern lifestyle.undoubtedly, in the past people
had more physical activities many of works were being done by hand. Take shopping as an example.people
used to go to shopping malls and purchase their needs by themselves, whereas nowadays many shops specially
supermarkets sell their products online. Replace the word
especially
As a
result
older Add a comma
,result
people
have less
activities like walking to the shops,buying items and Change the quantifier
fewer
then
coming back home.One solution for government
is to provide more Correct article usage
the government
sport
facilities like gyms in every neighbourhood for older Change the noun form
sports
people
to use. This
could lead to bring
more activity to Change the verb form
bringing
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elderly's
elder's
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the eldery's
eldery's
life.
Another reason is Correct your spelling
elderly's
that
poor economical situation. What I mean by Correct determiner usage
the
this
is that in many countries more families have to work harder to meet their needs.In some families
even children have to work to gain Add a comma
,families
a
normal prosperity. Remove the article
apply
This
tends to having
less time for children and grandchildren to visit their parents and grandparents. To tackle Change the verb form
have
this
issue older people
can do more voluntary works
or become a member of associations like NGOs. Fix the agreement mistake
work
This
could make them more sociable and make them feel more effective persons in the
society.
In conclusion, to reiterate Correct article usage
apply
this
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phenomenon
phenomenone
stems from two reasons. One of which is changes in modern life and another one is Correct your spelling
phenomenon
economical
situation. Add an article
the economical
Nevertheless
, these could be alleviated by more sport
facilities and doing more voluntary Change the noun form
sports
works
. Should these get implemented, the older Fix the agreement mistake
work
people
will become healthier and happier just like old
times.Change preposition
in old
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