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Many people believe that it’s better to learn something in a group rather than individually. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #it’s #group
Numerous people suggest that in terms of learning it is a great strategy to
study
 in a team compare with studying alone. I totally agree with
this
 statement for three reasons.
Firstly
, a
study
group
is always consisted
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 of
members
 who have a wide range of
specialties
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.
Therefore
, the
members
 can provide a variety of ideas
toward
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single
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 topic while studying. The more ideas we put on the table, the faster we can make a solid conclusion and solve some difficult
problem
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problems
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 without detours. It is considered to be the most effective way when we’re facing some complex and challenging subjects
such
 as calculus or physics.
Secondly
, when we
study
by
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 our own, we merely repeat previous
study
 plans, whether they are effective or not. While studying in a
group
,
members
 share their experiences on how they have done before, which allows others to make an evaluation of their own experience.
This
 may lead to a good feedback circulation that
make
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 us readjust the scheme properly.
Last
 but not least, working in a
group
 offers
comforts
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. You don’t need to face an unfamiliar subject on your own, and you can always have someone to turn to.
This
 is helpful because we always need a guide when we are encountering the unknown. In conclusion, I’m definitely an advocator of studying in
group
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 rather than alone for the three reasons above. Again, studying in a
group
 brings
members
 with different backgrounds which contributes to success in learning. It
also
 helps us to readjust our
study
 plan spontaneously.
Lastly
, people in the
group
offers
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 immediate helps to each other which is considerably desired while studying.
However
, everyone in the team should be fully devoted,
otherwise
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 the effect might be eliminated due to the lack of involvement.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collaborative problem-solving
  • exchange of ideas
  • peer support
  • social interaction
  • fosters
  • enrich
  • perspective
  • motivate
  • isolation
  • feedback
  • misconceptions
  • self-paced
  • retention
  • self-discipline
  • lifelong learning
  • customization
  • engagement
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