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pollution is becoming a serious issue in today's world. What are the primary causes of pollution? What solutions can you suggest?

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Pollution
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 is a common yet serious issue
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 causing worldwide concern and many innocent lives are in danger
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 of the careless actions of
human-being
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human beings
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.
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 the negative effects of
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 phenomenon and describe its solutions.
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pollution
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 is rising day by day
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 the several resources of pollutants that in the main, we can refer to as humans and man-made machines.
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 matter can lead to many health-related problems.
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, one of my relatives has a big difficulty with her breathing that was triggered by the poor air quality.
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, a lot of individuals are significantly
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affected by different types of deadly diseases because of the various
pollution
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 existing in the air and water that if it gets to a
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 stage, can cause lung cancer and asthma.
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, as it was written, the main pollutants are humans and we are causing the biggest harm to our motherland.
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, it is our responsibility to quit our damaging actions and be thoughtful for the next generation.
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, we can start using carpooling or public transport rather than using our private mode of transportation
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exhaust fumes only add to the problem. So by accomplishing our duty, we can lead the earth to a better health condition that benefits both the earth itself and the
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 creatures. In conclusion, just like any essential matter of today’s world,
pollution
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 should
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 be paid attention to and it is important to take all of the possible preventive measures to reduce every kind of
pollution
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; these methods need more knowledge and everyone’s cooperation can result in a better tomorrow.
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task response
The essay adequately addresses the main causes of pollution and provides some relevant examples, but there is a lack of clarity in presenting comprehensive ideas.
coherence and cohesion
The essay shows a basic logical structure, but there is a need for improvement in the introduction and conclusion to provide a better overall framework for the essay.
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