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Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.

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To be honest, I believe that a nap, especially after lunch, is really really necessary for work
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 in the late afternoon. Yes. actually, since I graduated and went to work, I have felt that. Thanks to weekends, I have time for my hobbies and to gather with my family. Of course not,
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 of working on weekends, employees need more day-off. People nowadays work so much, they always look tired and anxious. Well, in my country, people often gather at restaurants and drink beers. I like comfortable clothes at home. I am an active person, I like to play sports, so my body excretes a lot of sweat. I often wear T-shirts which are made of cotton fibre. They are cool, flexible and can absorb a lot of sweat. Of course, I like to watch the sky, especially on sunny days. White clouds have many shapes, sometimes they look like the scales of a dragon, sometimes look like a Buddhist
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 or a phoenix. I can imagine a lot of different images from the clouds. So amazing.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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