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The world is heavily dependent on oil for energy, which is unsustainable due to global warming. What future resource do you think will take oil's place? Why do you think this ?

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In the contemporary epoch, there is irrefutable debate among folk about the dependingness of individuals on fossil fuels like
oil
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. In my perspective, due to technological advancements in the upcoming years,
Lithium
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batteries
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, solar
panels
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 and
these kind
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 of stuff would replace the need
of
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for
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oil
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. In
this
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 discourse, I am going to
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expound on
expound
 all these edges in the forthcoming paragraphs.
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 the science of why I am thinking of
this
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 happening the most preponderant
aoint
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point
 is that it is continuously rooting out at
alarming
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 rate. So, the researchers have discovered various ways to keep control
on
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 these necessities in future by advertising
lithium
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batteries
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 and solar
panels
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 because these things are eco-friendly.
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, According to a recent survey, Tesla cars
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 work on
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batteries
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 as well as on the current of solar
panels
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,
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 can never be faulty in
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next
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the next
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 two decades. Surprisingly, people continuously
buying
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 these cars.
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,
this
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 trend will
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 to
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 positive for the welfare of humans.
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, another imperative pivotal related to the aforementioned proposition is that
,
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administrative
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administrative
 authorities are very
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conscious
concious
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conscious
 about the loss of
oil
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 because science is currently unable to invent a way to go to space without petrol or
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diesel
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diesel
 So, To save
this
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 unique, the government in many states
rise
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 the amount of petrol and publically promoting technological ways that can hide the need of
oil
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. To cite an example, Japan is
only
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 country where electrical cars are allowed to save fossil fuels.
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.
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 to promote my
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. In the nutshell, according to the aforementioned quarrels, I believe that the
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particular
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particular
 place of
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 would be taken by
lithium
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batteries
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 and solar
panels
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 because these are
the
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effective products and
long lasting
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 as well as, the government and scientists want to
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 and help them to explore space.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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