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Some people believe that universities should only offer places to students with high marks. While others believe that people of all ages should be allowed even if they don’t do well in school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The diagram illustrates how bricks are manufactured. Overall, there are 7 distinctive
stages
 involved in the process, from the initial stage of digging the soil to the eventual delivery of the finished.
First
, regarding the
first
 to 4th step, the machine digs the clay in the initial step, after which the dug soil is added to the process of gridding it and it transfers on the belt conveyor.
Subsequently
, the
processed
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 is added to water and soil before it is compressed into the mould. Afterwards, the moulded undergoes the process of drying for from one to two days.
Secondly
, focusing on the
last
 3
stages
, the dried for more than 1 day experiences the 2
stages
 of roast at the low and high
temperature
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.　The heated stage is followed by the
stages
 which cool the heated within a narrow space for from 2 to 3 days and afterwards, the cooled is packed respectively in the 6th stage. Eventually, the completed merchandise is delivered to the client
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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