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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?

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it is true that the advent of
technology
 has changed the way how
people
 interact with each other in many facets. From my perspective, I believe there could be both negative and positive effects. The influences can be seen in the relationship
of
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 education and social life.
Firstly
, as for the educational aspect, communicational software
such
 as zoom and teams, bring a conducive effect on students' learning. Many found that having online courses help them to be more concentrated on class and have better time arrangement as they do not have to spend time commuting from home to school.
Finally
, in regard to social life, it can say that
technology
 has deeply altered the pattern of how
people
 make friends nowadays. Facebook as well as Instagram,
for example
, allows users to know
people
 worldwide without a single step away from their homes. In my point of view, the progress of
technology
 does improve the way how
people
 interact with others, communication become much more convenient and time-saving. Geographic barriers are now no longer an impediment to communication.
However
,
such
 a pattern of interaction might lead to problems
such
 as social barriers.
For instance
, some individuals can have difficulty facing others in real life as they already form the habit of socializing via the internet in lieu of talking directly to
people
 face to face. In conclusion, as time goes by,
technology
 does bring differences in the way how humans interact;
however
, while a number of positive effects can be seen, other detrimental influences should not be neglected as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Interact
  • Social media platforms
  • Networking
  • Instant messaging
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Misunderstandings
  • Emotional context
  • Superficial connections
  • Deceptive identities
  • Privacy concerns
  • Social skills
  • Video calls
  • Online presence
  • Digital communication
  • Cyber relationships
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