In some countries,Owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people.why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Opinions are divided as to whether it is sometimes argued that purchasing
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better than leasing. Despite the fact that
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there are
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renting
home
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but
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believe that owned
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are usually more advantages. On the one hand, There are multiple advantages
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this
topic.
Firstly
, Maintenance costs are not required from
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,
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when you rent a property your
landloard
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landlord
will take responsibility for all fees, improvement,
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.
For instance
, if the roof leaks you can call
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to arrange
this
problem.
Secondly
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accommodation, which
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with
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lifestyle and their budget.
Moreover
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more easy
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because when people change their workplace,it might be effortless to move to another place.
On the other hand
, There are benefits of renting
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however
,
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possessed more important. As we know, Real estate
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properties
have
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opportunity
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oppotunity
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every year since the price will appreciate over the period.Based on my own experience, I bought a house worth 6,000,000 baht
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and the price was increased to 7,000,000 baht.
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gained 1,000,000 baht in return.
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allow people to do whatever they want
such
as repainting, renovating or
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permanent construction which they can do
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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