Govt. should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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In the recent era, countries population is growing rapidly owing to that
authority
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authorities

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should focus on
increase
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increasing

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the rail line to connect with town and city people.
Thus
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, few of them think of money would to spend on the streets. we will discuss both
view
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views

The singular countable noun view follows the quantifier both, which requires a plural noun. Consider using a plural noun or a different quantifier.

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in the following paragraphs with relevant examples and with my opinion in conclusion. On the one hand, Nowadays,
railways
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are more important in high population countries due to
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road
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roads

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getting
a
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apply

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block by over traffic as well as too expensive
road
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transportation in comparison to the railway. Thousands of people travel by train and reach their destination with less time and expense.
For example
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, Delhi state populaces are
increases
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increasing

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a lot, so their
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railways
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railway's
railways'

It appears that the word railways should use the genitive case. Consider changing the noun.

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uses are compulsory their folk. so helps
government
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the government

The noun phrase government seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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to reduce pollution and make
strong
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a strong

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country economy.
On the other hand
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, track development is too expensive
which
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it

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is not possible to government makes rail line on every corner but roads are cheap
instead
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of
railways
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. regime
need
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needs

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a lot of budget for
railways
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.
For instance
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,
authority
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authorities

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can do more open
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road
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roads

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where
railways
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are not possible with good and strong quality
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road
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roads

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.
Likewise
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, in
a rural areas
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rural areas
a rural area

The indefinite article a may not be required with the plural noun areas in this sentence. Consider removing the article, or changing the noun to singular.

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is not possible to make
railways
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, so
authority
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the authority

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has to focus on
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the highway
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the highway

The noun phrase highway seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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highway
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to connect big cities but can be possible
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railways
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for railways

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to connect one city to another urban city. To conclude, both are more important to developing countries,
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however
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,however

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government has to focus on
railways
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because nowadays roads are available at every corner but not
railways
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. so I think
railways
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are a must for a country.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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