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The money spent by the government on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A section of society opines that authorities should fund important social
amenities
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 like Schools and Hospitals rather than
Space
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 initiatives.I totally agree that finances should be spent on social
amenities
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 because of better
health
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 care and high employment.
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 with ,the primary reason finances should be allocated to public services is to ensure better
health
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 care.If authorities build hospitals , citizens will visit the facility when they are sick.
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 will help the doctors to diagnose them well and give them the best treatment.
Although
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 initiatives into
space
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 are good, the death rate will be high.While construction of
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 facilities brings about a low mortality rate,
Space
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 travel programmes do not.
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 ,it will be better for the legislature to construct more hospitals to save the lives of the inhabitants.
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,a country with a
health
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 care facility saves its citizens from diseases which can be prevented and save their lives.
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,another reason to invest more money to build social
amenities
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 rather than
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space
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 travel is high employment.The building of schools will help individuals to be enrolled in it.Education is the better way to seek a job.The majority of companies employ workers who are fluent in English and has
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good qualification.,
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 without , a certificate they can not be employed.
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,to be a nurse ,individuals must attend school to be that.
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,education helps inhabitants to get employed and boosts the economy. In conclusion, some individuals believe that government should invest money to build social infrastructures
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 of
space
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 travel.I concord with allocating funds for social
amenities
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 projects because it will ensure a low death rate and increased job opportunities.

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