The crime rare nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advanced technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

Yes
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agree with that.
Technology
can prevent and solve
crime
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, but
only
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an only
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physical
crime
. Nowadays,
people
put the camera in
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shopping
shoping
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shopping
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, public
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home
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of
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area
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in The
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shoppe
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,
people
can monitor each building in the
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shoppe
shape
shop
. When there is a thief that
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take
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something in there, we easy to identify where the building
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mean
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.
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advantage is when we leave home and nobody
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, there is a thief that
take
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our important thing, the camera
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us by recording video activity inside or outside
building
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the building
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. When we have
video
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a video
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, we can
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identify the thief.
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advantage
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of advantage
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technology
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of technology
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to prevent and solve
crime
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the crime
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.
Beside
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the advantage, there are some
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negatives
which
delopment
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development
of
technology
. Today, privacy information is spread out
in
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on
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every social media and maybe some
people
give information detail to google. Freedom of information can
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cause
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the
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crime
,
such
as :
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to hack the account bank -
People
can detect our history location,
this
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thievery, murder and other
crime
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for the
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men's
mens
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men
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are pornography, today
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men
men's
means
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men
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are easy to watch
pornogrphy
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pornography
in social media. So, we have to optimize the function of
technology
. We have
take
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advantage
advantge
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advantage
of
technology
,
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but do not let
technology
give
people
space to commit crimes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance
  • deterrence effect
  • DNA testing
  • forensic analysis
  • conviction rates
  • digital footprints
  • cyber forensic techniques
  • real-time communication
  • law enforcement
  • socioeconomic factors
  • cybercrimes
  • advanced technology
  • crime prevention strategies
  • privacy concerns
  • ethical issues
  • digital divide
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