The crime rare nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advanced technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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surveillance
deterrence effect
DNA testing
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conviction rates
digital footprints
cyber forensic techniques
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socioeconomic factors
cybercrimes
advanced technology
crime prevention strategies
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