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In today’s competitive world, many families find it necessary for both parents go out to work. While some say the children in these families benefit from the additional income, others feel they lack support because of their parents’ absence. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that these days that competition become very hard whereas that
life
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 is not easier like before and
parents
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 must provide a decent
life
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 for their
children
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. The question is, should both
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work
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 to help their
children
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? In
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 essay, I going to write my opinion and draw my conclusion. In terms of advantages,
parents
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 must
work
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 out in order to make their child live a good
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 and fulfil all the requirements of
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 for them. The main reason given to support
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 claim is that competition is become very hard
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, making money is harder than before and studies show that in some developed countries, newborn costs around 1000$ in the
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 five years of his
life
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. To illustrate, if the
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work
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 in their own jobs that will be effected in
children
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, the
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children’s
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 will feel that they are in
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a productivity
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 area.
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, when
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work
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 and make money
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 will be impacted their
children
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 and makes the family stable financially.
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, there are
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huge issues if both
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work
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 out.
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, there is no parental care for
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.
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,
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the
children
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 can not do well in their curricula, and
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on
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our future generation.
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, because of the parent’s control over their
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,
children
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 will have bad friends and may commit crimes and waste their future. In conclusion, there is fierce competition for a living but, there are multiple choices to making money with focus and live your child
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