Many manufacturd food and drinks contain high levels of sugar,which causes many health problems.Sugary products should be made more expensive o encourage peopleto consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

The majority of manufacturing companies produce products which contain high carbohydrates and

this

leads to health issues.some people opine that sugary drinks and foods should be costly to prevent citizens from consuming more.

However

, I oppose

this

view because mass education and government can help individuals to consume less

sugar

.

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essay will explain the reasons for my stance

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examples in the subsequent paragraphs.

To begin

with,one primary reason I oppose

this

opinion is mass education.Educating the public about the detrimental

effect

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effects

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of consuming high

sugar

using media platforms

such

as the

internet

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,Radio and Television will help individuals to be enlightened about their well-being.

while

social media platforms like Facebook and Instagram can be used to reach the youth,Radio and Television can be used to reach out to the elderly.Education like intake of high

sugar

cause

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diseases like Diabetes Mellitus and Obesity.,Meanwhile these conditions have led to the death of many people.For ,example 90 per cent of Ghana's society has diabetes

as a result

of intake of high carbohydrates.

Hence

,it will help them to consume no or fewer carbohydrates.

Secondly

,another reason I oppose

this

view is the government.Authorities can ban companies from producing products rich in

sugar

.

Although

business will suffer ,inhabitants will benefit.If the government had

bar

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organisations from manufacturing sugary products,there

will

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be no diseases like Diabetes and obesity.

This

will let individuals turn to home-cooked foods which are rich in all the nutrients in their right proportions.

Therefore

, increasing the health of citizens.

for

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instance,a recent study conducted in Ghana suggests that well-being status has improved after companies stop producing sugary drinks. In conclusion,

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essay

argued

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that increasing the price of a product is not the best option

instead

banning organisations from producing it and awareness creation is the best way to ensure

optimum

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health of the citizens