Many manufacturd food and drinks contain high levels of sugar,which causes many health problems.Sugary products should be made more expensive o encourage peopleto consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

The majority of manufacturing companies produce products which contain high carbohydrates and

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leads to health issues.some people opine that sugary drinks and foods should be costly to prevent citizens from consuming more.

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, I oppose

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view because mass education and government can help individuals to consume less

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with,one primary reason I oppose

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opinion is mass education.Educating the public about the detrimental

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of consuming high

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,Radio and Television will help individuals to be enlightened about their well-being.

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social media platforms like Facebook and Instagram can be used to reach the youth,Radio and Television can be used to reach out to the elderly.Education like intake of high

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diseases like Diabetes Mellitus and Obesity.,Meanwhile these conditions have led to the death of many people.For ,example 90 per cent of Ghana's society has diabetes

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of intake of high carbohydrates.

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,it will help them to consume no or fewer carbohydrates.

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,another reason I oppose

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view is the government.Authorities can ban companies from producing products rich in

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business will suffer ,inhabitants will benefit.If the government had

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organisations from manufacturing sugary products,there

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be no diseases like Diabetes and obesity.

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will let individuals turn to home-cooked foods which are rich in all the nutrients in their right proportions.

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, increasing the health of citizens.

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instance,a recent study conducted in Ghana suggests that well-being status has improved after companies stop producing sugary drinks. In conclusion,

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that increasing the price of a product is not the best option

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banning organisations from producing it and awareness creation is the best way to ensure

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health of the citizens